-the way my son’s mind works-

Wesley’s school assignment:

The following story is REALLY boring! Rewrite it on the lines beneath. Use adjectives to make the story more descriptive and interesting.

“The boy went to the fair. He met a friend. They ate popcorn. They went to a rodeo. They played games. The boy was tired. He went to his house. He got in his bed. He slept.”

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And Wesley’s rendition:

A boy from Spain went to the fair. He met a good friend. They ate jumping popcorn. It made them sick. Then they went to a crazy rodeo. They played games. The boy was hot and tired. He went to his broken down house. He jumped in his bed and slept for two years. The End.

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About ruthie.voth

Wife of one, mother of four, friend of many. Lover of details, color, good conversations, finding balance, and being honest. Passionate lover of a well-crafted sentence - even more so if it's witty. Weird blend of cynical optimist. I'm the worst kind of woman. I'm high maintenance, but I think I'm low maintenance. Somehow, people still love me. Must be grace.
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2 Responses to -the way my son’s mind works-

  1. I just love this. I might want to share it on my blog or in my/our newsletter if it is okay. My friend and I teach writing together and she has a writing book for teachers called Teaching the Story. This is a perfect example for us to use sometime. I will send her to your blog to see this.

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  2. ten4ruthie says:

    That’s fine, Aunt Joyce. I don’t think Wesley will mind.

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